To improve your first shot at writing a page headline, add a few more words. Preferably keywords.
Forget advice to write headlines as short as possible. That guideline tempts writers to produce teeny tiny headlines that just don't work. Intranet managers sometimes ask their authors to write really brief page headlines because they recycle the same headline as a menu item. Bad idea! Menu items need to be short but headlines need to be long.
Short headlines tend to be vague and generic. Examples:
Read those and you are none the wiser about the page's content. They are a waste of space: headlines should tell us something!
The New York Times (and every experienced newspaper sub-editor) knows how to write headlines that are genuinely informative. Moreover, though a sub-editor dreams up thousands of headlines in a lifetime, every headline is almost certainly unique.
That's what we need on web sites and intranets: informative, unique headlines for every page. If those headlines happen to be re-used on search result pages, they are genuinely useful. It's a miracle if this can be achieved with a short headline.
What do I mean by 'long'? Here's a breakdown of the number of words in the front page headlines of the New York Times, 1 March 2007.
Judging by this evidence, I'd say the New York Times regards 7- to 9-words headline as the ideal length. And that is pretty long, compared with the majority of headlines on business and government web sites. To fix a rotten headline, add more words.